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The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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The problem of ever-growing
population
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 has stroked as a global issue encountered by today’s generation. The main reasons for
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 rapid
growth
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 are mainly due to an ineffective
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control
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 measures and advancement in the healthcare system.
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 essay agrees that the steady rise of
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 is the major threat to mankind in
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 era because of its greatest impact on the environment and the wellbeing of the human beings.
Population
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growth
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 is reciprocal to the effectiveness of
birth
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control
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 methods like family planning and adequate knowledge on reproductive health. An increase in effectiveness of
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 measures lowers the
birth
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 rates. There are many cases of failure of
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 measures leading to unwanted pregnancies resulted from improper usage.
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, newly invented technologies in the healthcare system have increased the life span of human beings resulting in decrease
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 rates.
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, many women prefer to use temporary
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control
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 measures like
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control
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 pills which are easy to use, but less efficient and that result in increased
birth
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 rates and available treatments for many fatal diseases like cancer, myocardial infraction results in increase life span. In recent times, the greatest issue for humankind is the detrimental effect of rapid
population
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growth
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 on the environment and health. The environment is greatly destroyed by the human activities. An increased
population
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 demands for increase housing, employments and productions that resulted in the destruction of greenery and fertile lands turned to be industrial areas that in turn lead to pollutions and various health issues.
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, air pollution is the most common problems caused by human activities that lead to many respiratory problems of mankind. In conclusion, a rapid
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growth
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 is a serious problem resulted from inefficient
population
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control
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 measures and limited knowledge on controlling as well as improvements in healthcare facility leading to a longer life span. The subsequent impacts of
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 rapid
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on
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of
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 human beings are becoming serious due to irreversible damage to
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the ecosystem
ecosystems
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