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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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Many people claim that the teacher should teach academic knowledge for students at school and they will do the exam with the information that they have during the lesson so that they can have a good mark. On top of that, daily skills
such
 as cooking or dressing are
unecessary
not necessary
unnecessary
necessary
. I personally believe that not only academic
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
also
 daily skills
are
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is
 important. On the one hand, students need to have a thorough understanding of theory.
That is
 the
fisrt
preceding all others in time or space or degree
first
 element
for
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of
in
 the brain evolution of a child.
Secondly
, they can know clearly that what is they are being taught by the teacher. As
a
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an
 example, in the Biology subject, they can study about
animal
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the animal
animals
 or the plant that they have never seen before. Or in Math and Physic, they will learn how
to do
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doing
 all the mathematics.
On the other hand
, research
have found
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has found
 that the daily skill is as important as the academic theory. What they derive at school, they can apply it
in
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at
 home or anywhere.
For example
, they have to learn how to
cooking
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cook
 from books and they can cook something at home.
Dressing
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A dressing
 will make them more creative and have a distinct essence. Weighing up both sides of the argument, we can see academic knowledge and skills
such
 as cooking and dressing have
a
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an
 inextricable relationship. The balance of those two things will make students have a optimum
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