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Learning about deepest arsenal value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#value
strategy
Suggestion
Strategy
 to manufacture other kinds of
food
, which are healthier.
Moreover
, the consumer will have a lesser
choices
Suggestion
choice
 of fast
food
 and it leads to the deterioration of fast
food
 in their meals.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that
the high
Suggestion
the higher
higher
 tax will
impulse
compel to behave in a certain way
impose
 the price of fast
food
.
As a result
, the consumer will have to suffer
this
 higher price.
Nevertheless
, only until they have to pay for fast
food
 at a high price, do they stop to buy it.
Therefore
, they will prefer to prepare
food
 themselves
instead
 of eating fast
food
.
For example
, every morning, my mother always design a box, which contains full of rice, meat, vegetable,...
for
Suggestion
For
 my father's meal at work.
On the other hand
, by virtue of the higher tax on fast
food
, the government will have a greater fund to allocate to the health care treatments for
victims of fast
Suggestion
victims of a fast
food
. In conclusion,
although
 taxation policy is always a good approach, the governments need to integrate it with other methods
such
 as education, communication

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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