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Some people think that tourists should follow the traditional customs of the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #tourists #customs #host #country
All countries have
essensial
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
 things that have shown their culture.
in
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In
 most
cases people
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cases, people
 following their host’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
 and cultures of
country
 that have visited. In some
situation i
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situation, I
situation I
 agree and in other some
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree.
on
Suggestion
On
 one hand the local people are satisfied to copy their culture from tourist whom visit their
country
,
on the other hand
 tourist will have more fun if
their
people in general
they
 follow the
treditional
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
traditionally
 customs. I
desagree
be of different opinions
disagree
 with
this
 method of way in some part
,
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,
for instance
 the guy who visit the
country
 have
own cultur
Suggestion
an own culture
own culture
 that it may have a positive
effective
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effect
 on people who are as a host
such
 as founding social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and learning multi cultures and
multilanguges
 of tourists. In conclusion,
its
it is
it's
 better to adopt their culture and respect the
lifstyle
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 of
destination
Suggestion
the destination country
country
.
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.

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