More and more companies allow their employees to work from home rather than going into an office each day.Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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In developed countries, working from
employeers’s
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employing
employs
employees
local going to be increased,
moreover
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, these days majority of administrators and professionals spend their
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work’s
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work
time
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indoor
within a building
indoors
.
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issue has
advantage
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the advantage
an advantage
advantages
and disadvantage policy for people
in
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with
much
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many
reasons. In my opinion, the benefits of indoor
working
the act of traveling by foot
walking
is the most.
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,
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,
the most obvious benefits of working from
house
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a house
the house
or apartment are flexibility and convenience.Not only
this
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action reduces
amount
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the amount
of
cost but
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cost, but
also
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affect
produce
effect
on reducing their
time
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.
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secondly
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Secondly
,
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,
this
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can be help
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can help
some to get
more vacant
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more vacation
time
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to spend with their children and take care of them yet,
this
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is shown by
fact
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the fact
that usually parents who live in
developed situation
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the developed situation
must have
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work
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worked
for living
cost
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cost, hence
costs hence
costs costs hence
hence
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, when they are
at
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in
office
havn’t
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haven’t
any
time
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to spend with children or play
game
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games
with them
,
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,
with
this
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instruction they can fit working hours around
chidcare
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Childcare
Chidcare
,
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,
houswork
the work of cleaning and running a house
housework
and other commitment.
Thirthdly
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Thirdly
, by not working at office
participantssave
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participants save
valuabletime
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valuable time
and avoid having to endure the stresses of traffic
,
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,
finding parking spaces
,
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,
In
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addition if
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addition, if
the want to use transport services they have bothered for overcrowding.
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However
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However, this
this
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arrangement might seem ideal
,
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,
there are some downsides too
,
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,
For many members the most enjoyable aspect of the
work
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is the social
interactionFor
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instance, colleagues gathering and tell some
jokes and
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jokes, and
meet new partner have more
efficiant
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
on their behaviour rather than they do their
work
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alone. Gathering and find a new friends are effected on their interaction and it could be lunch person on the path of social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Overall, the advantages and benefiting of
this
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issue are more acceptable for employees and the company who wants to grow day by day
,
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,
moreover
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, it makes sense for
businesse
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
staff to chance of combining their
work
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and share their
time
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between indoor and outdoor.
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