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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is the case? What can governments do to help the amount of rubbish produced?

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It is often said that there has been an increasing
amount
 of garbage created by human beings.
This
 essay will examine the two main reasons for
this
 issue and what governments should do to reduce the
amount
 of garbage. One of the main
reason
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reasons
 for an increasing
amount
 of
rubbish
 is an excessive
use
 of
rapping
the covering (usually paper or cellophane) in which something is wrapped
wrapping
 layers. To illustrate, when I bought a music CD on an online shopping service in Japan, it was rapped by a
plastic
 film, stabilized on board by another
plastic
 film, and
then
, delivered in a box. Though the product was meant to be delivered safely,
this
 was apparently too many uses of
rapping
the covering (usually paper or cellophane) in which something is wrapped
wrapping
 materials. The other main factor that drives the issue is the
plastic
 bag
that is
 given in supermarkets and convenience stores. In the case of Japan, the
plastic
 bag is provided
with
Suggestion
to
 every
customer
Suggestion
customer, however
however
 little the purchase is, so thousands of
plastic
 bags are widely consumed. Turning to the possible solutions, in order to deal with the rapping issue, governments should encourage companies to
use
 recyclable materials, so that they will not stay in the environment as
rubbish
.
Also
, it would be effective to provide financial support
with
Suggestion
to
 companies that attempt to install
such
 materials.
In addition
, governments need to encourage customers to
use
 reusable bags for their shopping, so the
use
 of
plastic
 bags will decrease.
Moreover
, if bags that are made of a recyclable material are invented or introduced by governments, the economic activity will be even more environmentally friendly. In conclusion, I believe there are two factors that mainly cause the increasing
amount
 of
rubbish
, which are an excessive
use
 of rapping and
plastic
 bags.
Also
, in order for governments to reduce the
amount
 of
rubbish
, they should promote recyclable material to packaging and encourage consumers to
use
 reusable bags.

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