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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Many people prefer to
work
 on their own rather than
work
 as
emplyees
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
 under the
supervison
management by overseeing the performance or operation of a person or group
supervision
supervisor
 of others in a company. Free lancers become more popular than ever before. While some people prefer to
work
 as a self
emplyed
having your services engaged for; or having a job especially one that pays wages or a salary
employed
,
Accept space
,
 Others find it inconvenient to
work
 for themselves. Both views will be discussed and relevant examples will be provided. On the one hand, those who prefer to have their own
work
,
believe
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believing
 it gives them better control
on
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of
 their time.
For example
, an
emplyee
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employer
 will have a fixed 9
hours
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hour
 shift daily,
however
,
free lancers
a writer or artist who sells services to different employers without a long-term contract with any of them
freelancers
 will have more flexible working hours.
In addition
, the salaried person will have his salary as his only source of monthly income
,
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,
 while
self emplyed person
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a self employed person
self employed person
self employed people
 can have higher income since he will be the owner of the
work
.
Besides
, there is no age restriction for the
free lancer
a writer or artist who sells services to different employers without a long-term contract with any of them
freelancer
 unlike the salaried person that could retire at the his
sixitees
the decade from 1960 to 1969
sixties
.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks of having one’s own
work
.
Firstly
, the monthly income is variable, it goes up and down with
the market unlike
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the market, unlike
 having a fixed monthly salary.
Secondly
, being the owner of the
work meaning
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work, meaning
 that you will be busy all the time
manging
be successful; achieve a goal
managing
 and planning your
work
.
For example
, you can find an
emplyee
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employer
ample
 who
works
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has worked
 for 9 hours a day and his shift ends at 5 PM, while there is a lawyer, who has his own office for legal affairs, his phone
never stop
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never stops
 ringing all day. It is obvious that both groups of people have their own reasons for their choice. Those who prefer to be more
independant
free from external control and constraint
independent
,
Accept space
,
 choose to
work
 as self
emplyed
having your services engaged for; or having a job especially one that pays wages or a salary
employed
, while others prefer a
predfined
to define beforehand
predefined
 daily
work
 schedule. It is
recommened
push for something
recommended
 that one should consider his own abilities and
prefernces
a strong liking
preferences
 before making his decision.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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