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The bar chart illustrates the amounts of electrical generation and electrical usage in 2014 in ten nations.

The bar chart illustrates the amounts of electrical generation and electrical usage in 2014 in ten nations.
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The bar chart illustrates the amounts of
electricity
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 generation and
electricity
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 usage in 2014 in ten nations.
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, almost all the countries had
the
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 amount of
electricity
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 produced higher than that consumed, except for Germany. China witnessed the largest number of
billion
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kWh
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 in production and consumption. In 2014, the largest amounts of
electricity
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 produced and used were seen in China, at 5398 and 5322
billion
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kWh
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, respectively. In the US, 4099 and 3866
billion
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kWh
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 of electrical generation and consumption, respectively, were the following largest numbers. The figures were nearly four times higher than those in Russia, at 1057
billion
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kWh
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 of production and 1038
billion
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kWh
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 of usage. For the other nations, the numbers of
billion
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kWh
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electricity
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 were lower than 1000
billion
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kWh
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.
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, Germany was the only nation in the nations investigated that
electricity
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 consumption was higher than
electricity
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 production, at 582.5 and 526.6
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amounts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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