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Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

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Nowadays, it has been observed that developed nations provide their help to the developing or underdeveloped countries. Actually, in my opinion,
this
 is a positive sign and I am fully supporting with
this
 attitude of the world. The following essay state points to support my opinion.
Firstly
, for expediting the growth of a region, the living standard of the population has a great influence. The citizen's well-being is mainly depends on the food and the education. Here, if the rich countries can help them by providing the better learning infrastructure, which results to get better classes, in turn, they can develop as a good citizen and can start contributing the nation's growth.
As a result
, everyone can able to contribute to the world's development.
For instance
, India started helping the Africa by giving budget to develop the infrastructure, and now Africa's living standard increased and started contributing their knowledge towards space missions.
Secondly
, helping each other is a way to reduce the gap and can become one. Helping is a sign of unity. If a well settled country announce its help to an underdeveloped state, it lights the path for empathy. Receiving a hand to escape from poverty and illiteracy, gradually turns the poor country to increasing the level in the world.
Furthermore
, that will reduce the separation between the two slabs.
For example
, the USA
,
Accept space
,
 started helping the
India
Suggestion
Indians
 in the field of industry and now India reaches in a better height with respect of the industrial growth. The separation between the USA and India in
this
 field is reduced. In conclusion, in my view,
providng
give something useful or necessary to
providing
 helping hands to other nations is always good as it ultimately reduces the distinction between the countries and
also
 help to become united.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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