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Some people believe that University students should specialise in a particular subject, while others believe that they should study a range of subjects discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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People
 have different views about how much choice
students
 should have with regard to what they can
study
 at
university
.
While
 some argue that it would be better for
students
 to be forced into certain key subject areas, I believe that everyone should be able to
study
 the course of their choice. There are various reasons why
people
 believe that universities should only offer subjects that will be useful in the future. They may assert that
university
 courses like medicine, engineering and information technology are more likely to be beneficial than certain art degrees. From a personal perspective, it can be argued that these courses provide more job opportunities, career progression, better salaries, and
therefore
 an improved quality of life for
students
 who take them. On the societal level, by forcing
people
 to choose particular
university
 subjects, governments can ensure that any knowledge and skill gaps in the economy are covered.
Finally
, a focus on technology in higher education could lead to new inventions, economic growth, and greater future prosperity. In spite of these arguments, I believe that
university
students
 should be free to choose their preferred areas of
study
. In my opinion, society will benefit more if our
students
 are passionate about what they are learning.
Besides
, nobody can really predict which areas of knowledge will be most useful to society in the future, and it may be that employers begin to value creative thinking skills above practical or technical skills. If
this
 were the case, perhaps we would need more
students
 of art, history and philosophy than of science or technology. In conclusion,
although
 it might seem sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful subjects, I personally prefer the current system in which
people
 have the right to
study
 whatever they like.
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task achievement
The essay largely addresses the topic and presents a balanced discussion of both views. To further improve, consider adding more specific examples to support your points, particularly in the paragraph discussing the benefits of specializing in certain subjects.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas are expressed clearly and cohesively. Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, and the flow from one paragraph to the next is smooth. However, try to avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'Besides,' and aim for more varied sentence structures.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are strong, effectively framing your discussion and reinforcing your opinion.
task achievement
The essay presents clear and comprehensive ideas, effectively addressing both sides of the argument.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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