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Today, may people have little knowledge about the importance of natural world. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem?

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Although
 the nature around us has been providing life to us, people are unaware of nature’s
importance
.
This
 essay will explore two of the causes for
this
 change and suggest some ways people can improve their
knowledge
 about
natural
Suggestion
the natural world
world
. The biggest contributing factor underlying the apparent limited
knowledge
 of the natural
world
 is lack of general public awareness and education.
This
 is because people do not know about the natural
world
 and its
importance
 and environmental subjects are not considered as compulsory as other subjects.
Consequently
, people
have unwittingly been damaging
Suggestion
are unwittingly damaging
have unwittingly damaged
 the environment.
For instance
, petrol and diesel driven cars are being used, thereby causing serious menace to the ozone layer. Another key aspect relates to
this
 issue is materialistic lives. Since the competition
has been increasing
Suggestion
has increased
 in the job market, people are becoming self-
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
.
Therefore
, the
importance
 of the natural
world
 has been ignored. Despite these challenges
,
Accept space
,
the problems can be mitigated by taking simple and cognitive decisions which would increase the
knowledge
 of
natural
Suggestion
the natural world
world
 among people as well as students.
First
 of all, governments should make environmental science as compulsory subject so that students would pay more attention to it. Beside
this
, environmental projects, seminars and study tour should be arranged by the schools and colleges whereby all students can come across the
importance
 of
natural
Suggestion
the natural world
world
. A
second
 step can be taken is proper urban planning. Due to sprawling metropolis trees and parks are being knocked down and it should be restricted. Green zones, public gardens and zoos should be well planned and maintained.
Thus
, parents can visit these places with their children and see the natural
world
 around them as well as people can spend a chunk of time with their families. In conclusion, while lack of education and materialistic lives are key issues behind little
knowledge
 of
natural
Suggestion
the natural world
world
, it is clear that by compulsory education and urban planning, raising awareness of the nature is not an impossible task.

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