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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the number of social networking
sites
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 visited by internet
users
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 in Canada in 2014 and
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2015. We can see from the data that, in general, there was a growing tendency to use more than one site.
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 just over
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 of internet
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 did not use any social networking
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 in either of the years, the proportion in
this
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 category decreased from 22
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 in 2014 to 21
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 in 2015. In both years the highest proportion of
users
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 in any group fell into the ‘One site’ category.
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,
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 group declined sharply from 36
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 in 2014 to 28
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 in 2015.
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, the numbers who reported using two
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, three
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, four
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 and five
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 all grew over the period analysed. In both years the proportion of internet
users
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 fell as the number of social networking
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 increased, with only 2
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 using five
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 in 2014 compared to 4
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 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, users, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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