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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart shows the number of social networking
sites
 visited by internet
users
 in Canada in 2014 and
in
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2015. We can see from the data that, in general, there was a growing tendency to use more than one site.
Although
 just over
one fifth
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 of internet
users
 did not use any social networking
sites
 in either of the years, the proportion in
this
 category decreased from 22
percent
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 in 2014 to 21
percent
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 in 2015. In both years the highest proportion of
users
 in any group fell into the ‘One site’ category.
However
,
this
 group declined sharply from 36
percent
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 in 2014 to 28
percent
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 in 2015.
In contrast
, the numbers who reported using two
sites
, three
sites
, four
sites
 and five
sites
 all grew over the period analysed. In both years the proportion of internet
users
 fell as the number of social networking
sites
 increased, with only 2
percent
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 using five
sites
 in 2014 compared to 4
percent
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per cent
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 in 2015.
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