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people eat more processed food than they did in the past. why is this? what are the effects of this?

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People now eat more processed
food
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 than they did many years ago.
This
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 is mainly because people
dont
do not
don't
 have the
time
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 to cook and processed
food
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also
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 tastes good. Having processed
food
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 can have
alot
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a lot
 of impact on our health and can lead to serious issues like
cholestrol
an animal sterol that is normally synthesized by the liver; the most abundant steroid in animal tissues
cholesterol
 and obesity. Most people these days have processed
food
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 because cooking can take a lot of
time
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 and processed
food
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 are easy to get.
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furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
,
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,
it
also
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 has a great taste.
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,
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,
students studying in college and doing a part
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time often
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time, often
 happen to have lesser
time
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 to eat or relax.So it is
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 for them to grab a
hotdog
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hot dog
 and leave fast. Having processed
food
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 can have a very big impact on our health. Most processed foods do not give us all the nutrients we require for carrying a healthy lifestyle.
severe
Suggestion
Severe
 vitamins and calcium deficiency can be caused because of it. Apart from
this
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 processed
food
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 contain a lot of
fatwhich
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fat which
 can happen to increase our
cholestrol
an animal sterol that is normally synthesized by the liver; the most abundant steroid in animal tissues
cholesterol
 levels. One of the biggest problems we deal with while having processed
food
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 is obesity.
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, a recent study shows that 6 0f every 10 Americans have obesity. Mainly because consumption of Processed
food
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 is very high in America. In conclusion, we can say that processed
food
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 is being consumed more than it was many years ago. Mainly because of the busy schedule and the good taste it gives people even though it causes extreme harm to
out
of or belonging to us
our
 body.

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