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Successful sport professionals earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified, while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Although
 it is thought unjustified by some that successful athletes earn more income than other professionals, others hold the view that the pay is well -deserved. In my opinion, while it is valid to pay them
such
 a huge amount, other workers ought to be paid according to their contributions to mankind. On the one hand, supporters of the outrageous amount earned by these sport professionals believe that their earnings are justified based on certain reasons. One major reason for their support, is the rigorous and back-bending trainings these people undergo to become fit, and to be able to participate in all forms of competition, while
also
 making efforts to be champions. To illustrate, Cristiano Ronaldo, a football player, earns over 100 million pounds each month.
This
 is seen to be deserved
as a result
 of the duration he spends on workouts and other activities. Another reason they considered, is the realization that participation in these sporting activities is not continuous, and as
such
, the huge sum paid is meant to
last
 for a long time until another contract is awarded.
However
, I consider that other professionals in other fields deserve a pay commensurate with their services.
This
 includes Doctors, Lawyers, Police Officers etc.
For instance
, Doctors undergo rigorous medical training over a period of at least 12 years to attain the peak of their career. While doing
this
, they sacrifice pleasure and family time for the health and safety of the populace, but get paid about one-tenth of the earnings of an athlete.
Furthermore
, Police Officers are law enforcement agents that oversee the safety and security of the society.
Thus
, their duties, in my opinion, are much more important than trophies that can be won. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions regarding the earnings of different professionals, I believe that individuals deserve payments commensurate with their duties.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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