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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#internet #communication #people #place #information
In the present day scenario
internet
 is the best means to communicate across the globe and is a large pile of data where we can find about anything from hairpin design to rocket science. In my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 prefer the
internet
, it is a wonderful
place
 to obtain data and communicate with ease and we will discuss different view regarding
this
. If we view the below discussion in a positive sense, we lean towards the useful features net gives us for free and
also
 to an emotional level like
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restraint that attaches to something or holds something in place
fastening
 with the mother who lives on the other side of the world which will be difficult without the
internet
.
Also
, for a middle class student who wanted to study about
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
 in the world which could cost him a fortune can be learned for free via
youtube
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YouTube
 videos which won't be possible without data.
Although
 there are many uses as said before there is a downside
for
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to
of
 the
internet
also
 like privacy issues and
also
 deviating from the information which we were searching because of the suggestions and advertisements by the explorer which will consume our valuable time and
also
 money.
On the contrary
,
this
 can be minimised by changing some of the settings in the explorer so that the personnel information will not be leaked and
also
 suggestions can be filtered. From the discussion, we can conclude that everything in the
internet
 depends upon the search we do and the purpose of the usage of the
internet
 and the time we use it. If we let the
internet
 control our data it is the worst
place
 and if we do not do
so it
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so, it
 is the best
place
 to gain knowledge and a great
place
 for communication.
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