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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

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In some countries It's
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 normal for a teenage
college
 student to
work
 as well as carry on with their studies.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits for the students who are working while they are still in
college
.
Firstly
, most of the students
work
 while still in
college
 to gain
work
experience
 as in today's world to get a job
on
Suggestion
at
in
with
 a higher post not just the person's
accademic
associated with academia or an academy
academic
 scores are considered but
also
 their
work
experience
 is considered.
For example
, If a newly graduated engineering
students
Suggestion
student
 wants to apply for a higher post the would require
atleast
Suggestion
at least
 12 to 14 years or 5 to 0 years of
experience
(
Accept space
(
it depends on the post the person is applying for
)
Accept space
)
. And
secondly
, the reason why they have a
jobe
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
job
 when they are still a student is the living expenses n tuition fee of the
college
. In consideration to
this
, when a person travels abroad for
futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
 studies
the the
definite article
the
 living expenses n the tuition fee of the
college
 is very expensive for a middle-class families to pay for.
Therefore some
Accept comma addition
Therefore, some
 families
hasitates
pause or hold back in uncertainty or unwillingness
hesitate
hesitates
 to send
there
of them or themselves
their
 kids to study in abroad.
For example
 Even if
they they
people in general
they
 do send
then
objective case of they
them
 to study in abroad the students will prefer to
work
 while studying as to help their families with the finances.
This
 helps them to understand the value of money as well as help them learn how to manage their budgets. In conclusion, it is excellent that in some countries teenager students
work
 while studying as it helps them to gain
experience
, help their families with the finances and learn budgets management.
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