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In some cities, there is less control over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings. People can build in whatever style they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The number of buildings being constructed are growing rapidly. In certain cities, the government has less control over the planning and architecture of residential and corporate buildings which are constructed according to peoples own preference. In my perspective, the negative implications of it are higher than its positives. To be begin with, people construct a building without considering any future aspects. They do not consider about any future development which might happen around the place.
Besides
 that, people try to occupy nearby places as well illegally that later becomes disputed land and cause obstruction for growth in coming years. For illustration, many residents in Mumbai city have settled in the isolated
area
 where the highway was supposed to be constructed.
This
 shows that, the development of the city becomes difficult when individuals build homes on their own.
Similarly
, poorly planned large office buildings causes
traffic
 congestion. It was observed in the past that, corporate giants take over land from poor people and build shopping malls and offices.
This
 is done without looking at the
traffic
 flow from that
area
.
This
 aggravates the situation as, soon after the completion of the building, the number of vehicles going from that
area
 increases because people will come there for the job.
For example
, construction of the Twin Towers in Pune city's outskirts has caused major
traffic
 jam regularly as planners did not have visibility of vehicles flowing from that
area
.
Therefore
, government's approval must be taken to avoid blockage. In conclusion, I strongly believe that,
although
 the number of new buildings
are growing
Suggestion
is growing
 at a fast pace,
however
, they should be made only after approval from the system.
Otherwise
, it will have demerits in future growth and
traffic
. If
such
 practise continues, natural calamities can happen like earthquake or flood.
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