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Some people consider price as the most important thing to consider when buying a product such as a cell phone and services like medical treatment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Price
 is the
first
 thing that many people consider when purchasing a product or service. While I do admit that it is essential to spend our
money
 wisely, I believe that
money
 should not always be the chief consideration.
Price
 ought to be considered because it is indeed necessary to control our spending to avoid falling into the debt trap.
In other words
, before buying a product or service, we should identify whether it is a necessity or something optional. Even if it is a necessity, we should look at the
price
 tag before placing the order. Sometimes it is possible that two products serving the exact same purpose are sold at different
price
 tags.
For example
, a Samsung phone serves more or less the same purpose as an iPhone; yet there are countless people who spend inordinate amounts of
money
 on the latter just because they are fascinated by that brand name.
Such
 spending is never recommended, especially since it will
land
bestow a quality on
lend
 the buyer in serious debt.
Therefore
,
however
 tempting it may look a consumer must not buy a luxury item on credit.
By contrast
, there are situations when
price
 tags must be ignored completely. Health and medical related services and expenses fall into
this
 category. The amount of
money
 spent should never be a priority in these circumstances, as any delay in availing of the service may lead to a life-threatening situation.
Furthermore
, in the event that the required amount is more than what the patient could afford, they should still proceed by borrowing
money
 from a friend or obtaining a loan.
However
,
such
 situations are rare and in most cases
price
Suggestion
prices
 ought to be considered so that excessive spending is budgeted and debt is avoided. In conclusion, people should be careful about spending large sums of
money
 on goods and services, unless it is a matter of life and death.

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