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Some people say the Olympics Games are not relevant in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

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Despite some people say the Olympics Game are not relevant in the 21st century, it is still the most important
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 century because of it has the prolonged history and many experts respect the brand,
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 it has a good policy that has been accepted around the globe. Olympics Games has the prolonged history and it having held by many countries,
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 has been exists that long time ago and still being run nowadays must has spirit of international sport lovers in it.
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, the symbols of the Olympic Games is not only about sports, but
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 about the connection between the people around the
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 could be reflected via the logo consists of circles, as well as the light that appeared at the beginning of the
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 it is standing for the soul of an athlete that burned for the love of sports.
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, many sport experts around the
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 saw
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 very important because of it has a level of national, during the
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 a lot of national teams from many countries will gather and challenge each other with sports
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 as; soccer, swimming, running. If a team won the prize will not only bring the country an honour, but as well as a specialist that coached the team, bring their name to the upper class in a ranking table of a
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 class expert.
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, the
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 has been adopted around the
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 for a very long time and it has a good policy that came to an acceptance of the countries,
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 is quite difficult to replace the
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 for another
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, because of
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 a new international
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 that has not been adapted is hard to maintain and operate, the cost may overweight a benefit of having the new
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. In summary, even though the idea of a brand new international
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 is still not worth the efforts to adapt
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 the new
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 and say that the Olympic Games is not suitable for the 21st century.
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