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All cars that burns fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Car operating on fuels
such
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 as petrol, diesel and gas should be prohibited and replaced by battery efficient cars.
This
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 essay agrees the
usage
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use
 of electric cars as they are
environment
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environmentally
 friendly and are economical
comparative
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compared
comparison
comparable
 to any normal cars. Rechargeable cars are less harmful
on
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to
 the
eco system
a system formed by the interaction of a community of organisms with their physical environment
ecosystem
. The source of energy for these cars would be through water, which is a natural resource and we have in abundance. These cars would not be requiring any fuel source to drive, they would have a rechargeable cord which can be charged and utilize for more than 500 kms in one time. In fuel driven cars, we require to fill the tank in every 100 kms. Driving an electric car would give us no pollution. Pollution is one of the top reasons why we have reached towards global warming. If these cars are more actively used we can save our planet from deadly smog. In
recent survey it
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a recent survey, it
a recent survey it
 was mentioned that big companies like Hyundai and
ford
a shallow area in a stream that can be forded
Ford
 are launching
a
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an
 automatic chargeable
cars
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car
 for their contribution towards the saving the environment. Electric cars are financially friendly. The
fuels
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fuel
 price has gone sky high and it is really difficult in
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 era of
fluctuating economy
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the fluctuating economy
 to save money.
As a result
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, more people are preferring the chargeable
automobiles which
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automobiles, which
 are cost effective, they are less expensive than the normal cars and their batteries can be charged up to 5 years, which help the owner to prevent unwanted expenses. In recent research it was shown that people who have electric cars have more capacity for investments and deposits
then
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 of the fuel vehicles owner. In conclusion, fuels have been detrimental effect on nature and humans, they should be banned and people stop using it, they should be replaced by more nature and pocket friendly automobiles.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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