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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than of other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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In as much as I will agree want to agree that it is important to teach children the language of their
country
. It is
also
 important for me to
start
express in words
state
 categorically that I will disagree that it is more important to teach children the
literature
 of their
country
 than
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
.
Firstly
, we need to look at the various
advantage
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advantages
 of teaching children the
literature
 of
other countries language
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the other country's language
other country's language
. One of the
advantage
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advantages
 is that it gives children an
advantage
 above their peers when an opportunity arise to study in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
 and
also
 for interaction in business. As it is known that it is very easy to learn
literature
 of own
country
 easily than other countries. Taking time to learn about other
countries
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country's
 language is of benefit. Let take my case as an example, while growing up English was not my own
country
literature but
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literature, but
 it was used in teaching throughout my undergraduate through postgraduate.
This
 as given me the
advantage
 of writing so many professional
examination
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examinations
 as at the same time the privilege of writing IELTS which makes it easier. In my opinion, I solely agree that it is important to teach children
literature
 of other countries

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