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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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In the past, the majority of people lived in small communities where grandparents came from.
However
, now most people
tent
have a tendency or disposition to do or be something; be inclined
tend
 to live in big cities.
As a result
, people lifestyle has changed. There were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small
village
. I believe there were there mains benefits.
Firstly
, the small villages had better environment with fresh
weather
binary compound that occurs at room temperature as a clear colorless odorless tasteless liquid; freezes into ice below 0 degrees centigrade and boils above 100 degrees centigrade; widely used as a solvent
water
, fresh food and clean water than the large cities. As a consequence, living in there was good for people’s health.
Secondly
, everyone knew everyone else and, in the
village they
Accept comma addition
village, they
 were born, people often connected and helped other each, therefor no one ever felt lonely.
Also
, there was little crime in a small community. So people did not worry about theft and children could play safety in the
stress
a thoroughfare (usually including sidewalks) that is lined with buildings
streets
. It was a simple life, but everyone was happy.
However
, in my view, there were a number of disadvantages. Children did not get a good education because the nearest school
was
Suggestion
has been
 often in the
next
village
 or a town some miles away.
Also
, the small villages did not have a hospital,
there for
(in formal usage, especially legal usage) for that or for it
therefor
 it was very difficult when someone was ill.
On the other hand
, almost people worked in farm or field and they earned less money.
This
 meant that if young people were ambitious, they had to move to large cities and found a better job. In conclusion, I think older people
were
Suggestion
are
 happy with living in a small
village
.
However
, nowadays, there are more advantages to living in a large city and I think it is better for developing our life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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