Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages?”

Museums are educational places which are beneficial for people in
societies
Suggestion
the societies
.
However
, these days, people have to pay an entrance fee to enter many museums.
Although
this
phenomenon can lead to negative effects, I believe that there are for more positive effects. It cannot be denied that
price
Suggestion
the price
of tickets can bring about
detrimental impacts
Suggestion
the detrimental impacts
to people, societies, and the museums themselves. From
people’s perspective
Suggestion
the people’s perspective
, they are discouraged to visit the museum and not able to access useful information and knowledge freely, particularly the poor because they cannot afford
such
amount. From
societies’
Suggestion
society’s
perspective, citizens have fewer opportunities to access vitally significant places to learn history, science, art, and many other essential subjects. From museums’ perspective, they cannot attain one of their objectives to educate people.
Moreover
, they may have to close down as they lose more of their customers. Despite aforementioned disadvantages, I am convinced that to charge for admission figures brings about a myriad of advantages.
Firstly
, museums will have money to operate which covers their business overhead
such
as personnel cost, equipments, electricity and water bills.
Secondly
, the museums can generate their own revenue to improve the place effectively to attract people,
for example
, to update their exhibits and keep the place clean and good-looking. Having visited many museums myself, I have learnt that many museums which sell tickets are better than those that do not charge for tickets in terms of places, information, and management. In conclusion,
although
I recognize that the museums ticket sales can cause drawbacks to stakeholders in societies, I believe that museums should not remain free for all so as to be operated and developed most effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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