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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The strength of a country lies in the
health
 of its people, a nation can't grow and prosper with its
work
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working
 class being weak either Physically or economically. Having access to free
health
 services should be the duty of a government and the right of the citizens. In the past
decade we
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decade, we
 have seen a spurt in prices of
health
 services
,
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,
people involved in
this
 profession
tries
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tried
try
 to exploit the patients and as their
health
 is
involved they
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involved, they
 are even ready to pay any price for the
wellbeing
Suggestion
well being
 of themselves or family.
Secondly there
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Secondly, there
 are people who are either unemployed or
retired who
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retired, who
 couldn't
support
 their families for any medical conditions. The
health
 services in a country should be organised in
such
 a way that caters the need of the population as a whole
,
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,
 one
such
 step taken by the government of India is AYUSHMAN BHARAT
this
 scheme aims at providing medical
support
 to all the families of India
upto
 a limit of five hundred thousand rupees which is sufficient to provide the basic
health
support
 to the citizens.
Last
 but not the least I fully
support
 the cause that the free
health
 services should reach to every single
person
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person, although
although
 some restrictions might be necessary as advised techniques are way to expensive.

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