Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that the most fulfilling stage of a person’s life is during adolescence, while others believe that adulthood, despite things like a job, family and money concerns, is better.
This
essay agrees with the former rather than the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
view. It will
first
discuss how
grown-ups
a fully developed person from maturity onward
grownups
grown-up
are much less happy than teenagers because of the pressure they are under and
then
discuss how contented most teenagers are. It is widely agreed that when people reach maturity, they are expected to provide for themselves and
this
often lead
Suggestion
often leads
to unhappiness.
This
is because most adulthood have rent and bills to pay, as well as a partner and dependents to look after, which more often than not, leads to them doing a job that they do not enjoy in exchange for money.
For example
, a recent study showed that 70% of
people
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peoples'
peoples
lives in France would leave their jobs if they did not have
family
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a family
families
to provide them food and shelter, and 60% of these people stated that their job made them depressed at some point.
On the other hand
, young adults are free from all these worries because they are often supported financially and free from any trouble. Most of these youngsters live with their parents who pay for all their needs and the only thing that they have to focus on is studying. A recent research carried out by Cambridge University found that 80% of young people age between 12-21 year old said that they were much
happy
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happier
more happy
than adults. In conclusion,
this
essay has agreed that youth years
is
Suggestion
are
the happiest time than adult life because older people are under much more strain when it comes to money and people relying on them.
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