IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
The growth in the world population leads to destroying the
planet
 and facing more and more environmental problems
.
Accept space
.
some
Suggestion
Some
people including
Accept comma addition
people, including
 me argue that
extinction
Suggestion
the extinction
in
Suggestion
of
 specific species of flora and fauna is the major environmental problem, while some believe that other environmental issues are more pressing. The loss of some planets and animals has some devastating impacts not only for human beings but
also
 for the earth. Extinction in species of animals causes a problem in the food chain which affects humans who feed themselves from animals. Like a fisherman who
can not
can not
cannot
 go fishing because of the loss of some specific types of fish.
this
Suggestion
This
also
 harms the biodiversity of the
planet
 which has a crucial effect on discover and access to medical resources as a significant proportion of drugs are obtained from biological sources. Some people argue that other environmental
issues including
Accept comma addition
issues, including
 global warming and climate change are more important.
factors
Suggestion
Factors
 like population and
humans
Suggestion
human
humans'
 activities in order to accommodate their needs causes pollution and deforestation, which makes the
planet
 vulnerable. Forests can prevent pollution by producing oxygen and absorbing carbon dioxide are being caught, with
this
 fact people are contributing to climate change indirectly. In conclusion, I believe that individuals and governments should prevent the distinction of
planets
buildings for carrying on industrial labor
plants
 and animals by taking serious steps, so the
planet
 can have its natural balance to survive the ecosystem and reduce the climate changes, which causes other issues on the
planet
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
What to do next:
Look at other essays: