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The bar graph shows the distribution of
four means
Suggestion
the four means
 of
transport
 in a European City. Data have been collected in a 20 year gap in between 1960 and 2000. It can be seen how across the years the most preferred
transport
 modes shifted from foot to
car
Suggestion
the car
, leaving the bus statistics oscillating, and bike ones decreasing together with walking. It appears obvious how people preferences changed during these 40 years: car
transport
 in 1960 was the less preferred one, with just 5% of overall travellers choosing it, while in 2000 it got very popular, reaching the 35%.
This
 growth is followed by a drop in the usage of
bike
Suggestion
the bike
bikes
, which went from 25% down to 5%. The same decreasing trend is shown by foot
transport
, which dropped from almost 35% to a bit below 10%. While the others means of
transport
 experienced a clear increase or decrease,
this
 can't be said for the bus: in
fact it
Accept comma addition
fact, it
 oscillated around 20% of users over all the travellers.

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