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Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, testing on animals is considered as a brutal activity and I concur
this
 statement.
Also
, it is common to see a long debate on different media,
such
 as print and digital media, to stop
this
 heinous act.
This
 essay will arguments for and against the
animal's
Suggestion
animal
 experiments. On one hand, science has evolved on its peak and various tests on different animals are being performed by scientists, all over the world, so that they can save individuals from various undiscovered diseases. A recent study,
for example
, has been made and it revealed that many antidotes have been developed after the successful experiments on animals and
thus
, it saved many peoples.
Furthermore
, some
animals
Suggestion
animal
animal's
 body organs have similar to man,
therefore
, it is convenient to do some practice on them
instead
 of directly on patients.
On the other hand
, animals are
also
 a beautiful creature of God and people has no rights to put them
on
Suggestion
in
 the cage and perform experiments for their own needs.
This
 is extremely an
unhuman
without compunction or human feeling
inhuman
inhumane
 act, which has been
continuous
Suggestion
continued
continuing
continuously
 for many decades and it should be stopped. In order to diagnose the root cause, doctors give virus injections to a healthy monkey and sometimes these animals died due to lack of medicines.
Further
, these
animals not
Accept comma addition
animals, not
 able to speak and defend like a human, but it does not mean we use our power and brain to control them. To recapitulate,
although
 we have
cure
Suggestion
cured
 of many viruses after the successful testing on pet animals, it cost many lives of different animals throughout the world, which is not acceptable in
this
 educated society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controversial
  • prevalence
  • scientific research
  • proponents
  • opponents
  • medical breakthroughs
  • vaccines
  • treatments
  • critical data
  • regulatory frameworks
  • ethical guidelines
  • minimize suffering
  • moral objections
  • animal rights
  • species differences
  • unreliable results
  • alternatives to animal testing
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • volunteer microdosing
  • nuanced
  • complexity
  • weighing
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