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These days, it seems an increasing number of people are concerned about
immigration
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. People want to go to the other countries in
hope
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the hope
hopes
 of a better future. According to data from the International Organization for Migration (IOM), nearly 100.000 Vietnamese people
immigrate
leave one's country of residence for a new one
emigrate
 every year. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss some causes and negative effects of
immigration
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 in the native
country
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. There are two main reasons why more people wish to migrate.
First
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, there may be high unemployment in their native
country
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. Without a job, people will not have enough income to cover the necessities of life.
Therefore
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, they immigrate to a new
country
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 to seek a job.
Second
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, education system in their native
country
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 may be inadequate or inaccessible. In Vietnam,
for example
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, most parents do not want their children to study here because they believe the education environment is not good and lack of practical application.
Immigration
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 can have some detrimental impacts on the home
country
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.
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, the
country
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 may lose talented people who could
otherwise
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 contribute their knowledge and skills to the development of the
country
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. Professor Ngo Bao Chau,
for instance
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, is one of the most famous mathematicians in Vietnam.
However
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, he has been living and working in France for a long time because his salary in Vietnam was insufficient.
Furthermore
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, if the brain drain continues, it could adversely affect the
country
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’s economy long term. To summarize, joblessness and a poor education system are two primary causes of
immigration
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. Governments should be aware of the long-term, detrimental impacts of
emigration
migration into a place (especially migration to a country of which you are not a native in order to settle there)
immigration
. In my opinion,
however
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,
immigration
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also
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 may bring beneficial effects to the native
country
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.
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