2. Children have to be educated, but they also have to be allowed to learn things for themselves. How realistic do you think this is?Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, people have many conflicting views about children’s

education

. Some parents believe that

education

policies should be strict. On the other side, some parents believe that leave children to learn things on their own. In my

opinion it

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opinion, it

is not a right choice to choose one side. As a child one has to learn many things they need proper guidance for it and

also

need to explore their inner self. At

first

, if parents

allows

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allow

children to learn things by

himself

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himself, then

then

might be they took the wrong choices or they were lost. At a certain age they were not aware about some social ethics and moral values,

as a result

of that they choose the wrong way. Some children do not have respect for others,

instead

of helping others they trouble them.I think

this

also

reasons

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the reason

reason

a reason

for bullying problems in school and juvenile crime.

However

, strict

education

policies are

also

not preferable. If there are lots of rules and regulations for each thing they feel suffocated. Sometimes parents create an inflexible environment to educate

them but

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them, but

instead

of development they suffered from mental pressure and they behave

rebellious

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rebelliously

. From my point of view, it is necessary for parents to understand that when their children need to be advised or when they can do alone.

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also

important to teach them life

lessons

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lessons, however

however

, one day as an adult they

also

have to make tough decisions. So parents have to be maintaining balance in kids

education

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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