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A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure. Other services should be provided by private groups in the community.

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There is no doubt that the government should be responsible to provide defence and other important facilities, yet some people think that it's not its job to carry out other tasks. People who believe that the government is not obligated to enter in
such
 main domains as health and education, allege that as they have the temptation that it should be done by private companies, as the taxes should only be spent on the country's defence and other infrastructures only. They claim that by letting some companies manage
such
 domains will create a competition between them to generate the highest possible profits, forcing each of them to enhance its facilities and services to drive people to use their utilities.
This
 will cause higher quality standards to form in
such
 essential fields. While in the other side, other citizens give their support to the idea of that the government should be enrolled in
such
 severe fields.
This
 belief is generated from the idea of paying taxes in order to receive a high quality
service
 with a convenient price, as by letting other private sectors deal with
such
 sensitive aspects, problems may be issued. One of the main issues is the price that will be paid to get
such
service
. Not only is that
this
 problem is what worries people l, but
also
 the fear of not getting what they deserve, as these companies might only
grave
feel grief
grieve
crave
 for maximum profits, regardless of the standard of
service
 supplied. In conclusion, I strongly believe and stand firm that it's our right to acquire the best
service
 at the lowest possible cost, and
this
 will only be fulfilled if our governments take
such
 duties.

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