These days, cell (mobile) phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
mordern
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
era, mobile phone has become
crucial device
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a crucial device
on
everyones
life than any
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other things
. As per the nature’s Law, everything
have
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has
its
onw
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
pros and cons. In the
samw
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
way mobile phone has it too. I do believe that
metits
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met its
me tits
of
this
new technology have overcome the
demertis
a mark against a person for misconduct or failure; usually given in school or armed forces
demerits
to some extent but not fully. To support my
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react verbally
answer
answers
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have
further
explaination
a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.
explanation
explanations
below.
to
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To
begin with,
this
achievement have
myrid
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a myriad
myriad
myriads
of
advatagee
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
.
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.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all
,
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,
it will connect people who are far away from each other by means video calling or
facetime
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Facetime
excetera
more than is needed, desired, or required
extra
which people can make only by having
internet connection
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an internet connection
and supportive
cellphone
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cell phone
,
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,
for an instance my family lives in
USA
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the USA
and I am studying in
canada
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
. We are seeing
eachother
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each other
almost whole week.
Thus
,
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,
internet and mobile phone companies gain more profits.
Secondly
, people can make more friends on social media who share common interest so, one can never
fill
undergo an emotional sensation or be in a particular state of mind
feel
alone in
this
busy world.
However
, people have to be more
carefull
exercising caution or showing care or attention
careful
carefully
because both
technology
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technologies
have some disadvantages. The prime demerit is that none of the one gives a proper privacy setting.
Pravacy
the quality of being secluded from the presence or view of others
Privacy
is the most important in the means of technology. There are
increae
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increasing
increase
increases
in numbers of cyber crime
.
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.
for
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and
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
an
example Just two years back, one of my close
friend
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friends
made a friend on
facebook
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Facebook
and
then
he cheated her.
to
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To
summarize
,
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,
mobile and internet usage has been increasing day by
day but
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day, but
we
can not
can not
cannot
overlook the
disadvatage
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantage
of using
this
developmental device.
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