In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as children can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

The rapid progression in
Internet
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the Internet
has paved the way for the growing popularity of distance learning. People are now speculating on the possibility of the Internet taking the place of a traditional
school
. In my opinion, given the continued advance in technology, Internet-based learning can serve as
alternative
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an alternative
to traditional class based learning. Online
education
has
large number
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a large number
of advantages. It
is allows
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allows
students to set their own study time. Unlike, traditional learning online courses offer children greater flexibility and enable them to create a time table in line with their need and
characterstics
a prominent attribute or aspect of something
characteristics
characteristic
.
Student
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The student
Students
A student
can
also
save
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
fees because a virtual
school
normally charge the students much less than a conventional
school
does. It is particularly a great opinion
for
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of
those students with
physically
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physical
handicaps, who have great difficulties is to commuting to
shcool
an educational institution
school
campus. For those who live away from the
school
, online
education
is remarkably favourable. It can be accepted that Internet likely to be
replace
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replaced
physical
school
as an
education
provider in the near future. If its drawbacks are removed. The
first
drawback of virtual
school
is
lack
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the lack
of human contact, as opposed to noted merit of traditional teacher led
education providing
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education, providing
students with ongoing daily interactions with teachers,
this
weakness can be solved by taking advantages of band with network
teachnologies
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
. The interaction between students can be
guranted
acknowledged as a supposition
granted
guaranteed
when one can contact with another, whenever and wherever he or she likes via emails, post comments on
message board
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message boards
a message board
and chat rooms or even video conference for communication. The educator
are
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is
also
concerned that online learning can not make all skill and knowledge transferable for
exmaple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, some courses require a high production of hands on practice, which is beyond the capacity of online training.
This
problem can be
neverthless
despite anything to the contrary (usually following a concession)
nevertheless
addressed by introducing multimedia as teaching aid
.
Accept space
.
By using audio and video students can sample different learning styles and
aquire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
both general and
specilalised
developed or designed for a special activity or function
specialized
specialised
specialist
knowlege
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
of
subject
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the subject
a subject
. As suggested above, there are plenty of benefits of online
learning including
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learning, including
flexibilities, cost saving and convenience
.
Accept space
.
Although
, it has two problems, lack of interaction and tailing to provide
wide range
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a wide range
of courses.Both can be overcome as the technology advances.
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