Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the arts are just as valid as other
subjects
, especially for primary school children. This
essay agrees with that statement because in artistic subjects
, students
can discover their potential talents early on, and they give them the chance to express their feelings.
An introduction to arts-related subjects
at an early age allows students
to discover what they are good at. Not everyone has a gift for academic subjects
such
as mathematics or science and many students
may not realise their potential in other areas if they do not have the opportunity to first try these subjects
at school. For example
, in schools without subjects
such
as music, art and drama, students
may be reliant on their families to introduce them to such
activities, which means many will not even have the opportunity to try.
Furthermore
, creative subjects
allow young students
to share what they are feeling with others. Unlike in science subjects
, activities such
as singing, painting, and acting remove inhibitions and give a platform to indirectly show student’s feelings through these artistic mediums. This
can help detect emotional problems within a child which may not have otherwise
been expressed. For example
, school psychologists can tell much more about a young child’s emotional state from a painting they did in art class than they can from a history project.
In conclusion, this
essay agrees that music, art and drama are of equal value to other subjects
in the primary classroom because they enable all children to discover aptitudes outside the narrow academic focus, and they provide an opportunity for pupils to express their emotions.Submitted by drcamt on
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