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In the last century when a human astronaut arrived on the moon, He said “it is a big step for mankind”. But some people say it makes little or no difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Almost every day we read something in the papers about the latest exciting developments in the
space
 race. Many people are of the view that all the money and energy spent on
space
 exploration and
research
 is a complete waste because it has no effect on our daily life. I,
however disagree
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however, disagree
. In the following paragraphs I shall discuss how
space
research
 has touched our lives in more ways than one. The technology that put men on the moon, launched
space
 shuttles and will build a
space
 station has found its way into everyday life on earth. Common secondary uses of
space
research
 are called spin-offs. The common smoke detector used in homes was
first
 prepared for spacecrafts as a warning system. Computer bar codes in retail stores, shock absorbing shoes used by tennis players and athletes, lightweight materials used for helmets and sporting materials and non stick coating used in pans were all
first
 developed as part of
space
research
.
Space
 technology has provided many benefits to the medical field as well.
Pace makers
Suggestion
Pacemakers
 used to treat cardiac as well as remote monitoring devices for intensive care patients and portable medical equipment carried aboard ambulances are but a few applications of
space
 technology providing daily benefits in hospitals, offices and homes. Artificial limbs of lesser weight are
also
 a by-product of
space
research
 and these are a blessing for the physically challenged. Not only that, it is well known that global warming will soon transform our Earth into a boiling pot.
Then
 it would be very essential to find alternative places to live. If we are able to find signs of life elsewhere in
space
 it would be a jackpot for mankind. To sum up,
space
 exploration and
research
 has touched our everyday lives in numerous ways. So, it definitely is a big step for mankind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • monumental significance
  • advancing technology
  • inspiring innovation
  • materials science
  • computer technology
  • satellite communications
  • psychological impact
  • inspirational impact
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics)
  • direct benefits
  • day-to-day life
  • technological advancements
  • immediate application
  • everyday conveniences
  • financial cost
  • space exploration
  • opportunity cost
  • Earth-based issues
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