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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give youe own opinion.

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Technologies changed the way of living life. At present
time
, mobile phones are becoming essential part of the human being. A group of people is in favour of watching the movies on electronic gadgets, whereas others refuting it and have counter thoughts that cinema is the only source to provide pure
entertainment
 toward films. Discussing the foremost view, the strongest argument is, watching a
movie
 at home is cost effective. To justify, internet facility is now available in affordable price. So, enjoying the
movie
 on mobile or tablet is being a crucial part of the middle class family.
Moreover
, the
time
 flexibility is
one
 of the focal points in favour of accessing the media on electronic devices.
For Instance
, people who
can not
can not
cannot
 spend three hours of leisure
time
 for the
movie
, can enjoy
movie
 on mobile based on their
sloting
a police investigation to determine the perpetrator
sleuthing
time
conveniency
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
. Others have different perceptions, the foremost
one
 is, facilities of cinema provides pure
entertainment
. A huge sound proof hall, high quality sound, big screen, these are the key features in inclination toward the multiplex.
One
 can fulfil the purpose of exact
entertainment
 to relax from a stressful life.
Furthermore
, the real feel of the story can only be received by big screen
movie
.
For example
, the action
movie
 has many scenes of car racing or gun firing, which are full of sound is not effective when it seen in the mobile. In conclusion, I believe that cinema is
one
 of the greatest options of
entertainment
 which provides huge picture in
proper environment
Suggestion
the proper environment
a proper environment
.
However
 the media provided on the latest mobile application
is
Suggestion
are
also
one
 of the affordable option for the people.
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