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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Education plays an indispensable role in building a successful
career
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 in a person. Individuals attend college and universities for several reasons,
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 as experiences, insight, and
career
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 preparation. In my perspective, people study in universities for making bright
future
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 ahead. It is certainly true that education is the most powerful weapon which we can change the whole world. The main advantage of attending college is that there are myriad things which students can start learning and enhance their knowledge of the distinctive course. As the pupils do different subjects,
this
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 may help to develop their
theory skills
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theory, skills
 as well as practical skills and become a strong person in their
career
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, the development of every nation would increase in
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future
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the future
 around the globe. To illustrate, a recent Cambridge study revealed that universities
also
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 furnish job placement for scholars who completed their degree or another course which they can easily
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their fundamental needs in their life. So, it may assist in every pupil
for
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in
 making bright
future
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. Nowadays, more and more people attend college to increase their broader horizons of knowledge about innumerable skills which may help people in their
future
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 life.
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, learners know about how to behave superior
to
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with
 strangers and they may become a punctual, good personality and even
responsable
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
 person,
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 it would be very beneficial for the enhancement of their nation.
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, even if the universities or colleges provide different foreign language for students,
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 they can easily learn every language which can lead to a decreased level of the language barrier. To conclude,
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 it is a decent way to attend
universities
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university
 lectures because the student could become a self-independent in their
career
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 life.
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, it seems that the government should pay the whole tuition fees for poverty-stricken
people which
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people, which
 is substantial for their nation as well as society members.
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