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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year Summarise the information by selectign and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The southwest
airport
 was planned to be renovated next year. There are some changes in the
airport
 layout
after
this
 construction is finished. At the moment, the
airport
 has one gate for departures and one for arrivals. If we go through the departure gates, we can find check-in counters on the left and a
cafe
 on the right. Afterwards, passengers have to go through the security and passport control
that is
 located right behind the
cafe
. There is a hallway that connects the front area to the terminal. Currently, the
airport
 has a walkway and 8 gates in the terminal.
Additionally
, there is
also
 passport control and customs that the passengers have to go through before running into the arrival gate. By next year, there are a few changes being made to the layout of the
airport
. There will be an additional gate to both the departures and arrivals. The area that used to be check-in counters will be replaced by the bag drop,
while
 the check-in counters will be moved to the opposite. Meanwhile, the
cafe
that is
 formerly located in that particular place will be relocated next to the bag drop.
Moreover
, the hallway that connects the terminal and departures will not be empty anymore because there will be new stores built.
Furthermore
, the terminal will have 18 gates and a sky train that will be built in the middle of the terminal. Apart from that, there will be a new
cafe
, ATM, and car hire in the arrivals area.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs for better flow. For example, use linking phrases like 'Furthermore' or 'In addition' more strategically.
coherence cohesion
Provide a brief concluding statement that summarizes the main changes and significance of the airport redevelopment.
task achievement
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'replace by the bag drop' should be 'replaced by the bag drop area.'
task achievement
Clear articulation of main features and changes between the current and future airport layout.
task achievement
Usage of specific details and locations to support your description, such as mentioning the relocation of cafes and the addition of stores.
coherence cohesion
Logical progression of ideas, describing the current setup of the airport first and then detailing the future changes.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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