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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

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There is a plethora of
food
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 products that are ubiquitous these days.
what
Suggestion
What
 makes people have their own attitude toward the products is the fact that they can be produced, packaged, and sold in various ways.
First
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, it may
justified
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justify
 that people's lifestyle is the reason for which they choose a product.
Even cost
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The Even cost
 of the
food
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 have been not the issue about which people are
concern
Suggestion
concerned
,
time
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 is of utmost importance in the modern life. To illustrate, long-hour
worker which
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worker, which
 have not enough
time
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 for home-made meals prefer frozen
food
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 or meals which are prepared. Students can
be be
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
be
 a good example of people who are interested in fast foods. Not only are fast foods available, but
also
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 these dishes save
time
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.
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Moreover they
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Moreover, they
 are convenient and low-cost
pricing
Suggestion
pricey
.
On the other hand
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, due to vicissitudes of modern day financial issue is the main reason why some shoppers care about
cost
Suggestion
the cost
 of the
food
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.
Therefore
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 the more costly
food
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 is, the less likely it is that it has a strong consumer demand.
For instance
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, having
felt serious
Suggestion
felt a serious
 concern about
cost
Suggestion
the cost
 of living, some parents with large families should consider economic issues for choosing a
food
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.
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Also some
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Also, some
 people who have plenty of
time
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 to prepare meals by their
own
Suggestion
owners
 have worry about
quality
Suggestion
the quality
 of what they eat. A
food
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 hygiene is believed to be the key to healthy life
accordingly
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 people are keen to have home-made or organic foods. The other factor affecting your choice is where you live my city is where in which most people are Farmers and fishermen,
thus
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 they have easy access to healthy
food
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such
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 as fresh fish and vegetables. To sum up, there is a plethora of items that result in
variety
Suggestion
varying
variable
variant
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 towards
food
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 product, the most significant of which are people's a style of living, having
financial issue
Suggestion
financial issues
a financial issue
, being
worry
Suggestion
worried
 about health and the place people live in. I believe
money ability
Suggestion
the money's ability
money's ability
 to buy is considered of
the great
Suggestion
greatest
 importance to select a product.

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