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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

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There is a plethora of
food
 products that are ubiquitous these days.
what
Suggestion
What
 makes people have their own attitude toward the products is the fact that they can be produced, packaged, and sold in various ways.
First
, it may
justified
Suggestion
justify
 that people's lifestyle is the reason for which they choose a product.
Even cost
Suggestion
The Even cost
 of the
food
 have been not the issue about which people are
concern
Suggestion
concerned
,
time
 is of utmost importance in the modern life. To illustrate, long-hour
worker which
Accept comma addition
worker, which
 have not enough
time
 for home-made meals prefer frozen
food
 or meals which are prepared. Students can
be be
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
be
 a good example of people who are interested in fast foods. Not only are fast foods available, but
also
 these dishes save
time
.
Moreover they
Accept comma addition
Moreover, they
 are convenient and low-cost
pricing
Suggestion
pricey
.
On the other hand
, due to vicissitudes of modern day financial issue is the main reason why some shoppers care about
cost
Suggestion
the cost
 of the
food
.
Therefore
 the more costly
food
 is, the less likely it is that it has a strong consumer demand.
For instance
, having
felt serious
Suggestion
felt a serious
 concern about
cost
Suggestion
the cost
 of living, some parents with large families should consider economic issues for choosing a
food
.
Also some
Accept comma addition
Also, some
 people who have plenty of
time
 to prepare meals by their
own
Suggestion
owners
 have worry about
quality
Suggestion
the quality
 of what they eat. A
food
 hygiene is believed to be the key to healthy life
accordingly
 people are keen to have home-made or organic foods. The other factor affecting your choice is where you live my city is where in which most people are Farmers and fishermen,
thus
 they have easy access to healthy
food
such
 as fresh fish and vegetables. To sum up, there is a plethora of items that result in
variety
Suggestion
varying
variable
variant
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 towards
food
 product, the most significant of which are people's a style of living, having
financial issue
Suggestion
financial issues
a financial issue
, being
worry
Suggestion
worried
 about health and the place people live in. I believe
money ability
Suggestion
the money's ability
money's ability
 to buy is considered of
the great
Suggestion
greatest
 importance to select a product.

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