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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

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Shoppers now have different choices of their
food
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 products. There are
also
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 many criteria in order to select the
food
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 and each person has their own attitude towards the products they choose. A number of people buy
food
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 that suits their
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
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, students may prefer instant foods
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 as breads, noodles since they are convenient and quite cheap as well. Meanwhile, well-paid workers have a tendency to pick up
food
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 from the supermarkets. Another example is that long-hour workers will choose frozen
food
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 or products that can be stored in a long time since they do not have much time for preparing meals. Meanwhile, many other people like fresh
food
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 that can be used during one day.
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, quality and the origin the products are
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 the standard for most shoppers when they need to decide what to buy. Recently, news about dirty foodstuff and the fact that farmers are now abusing pesticide do worry buyers when they go shopping. Acknowledging that those chemicals can be the main cause
for
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of
 many health problems, shoppers gradually pay much attention to the origin of the
food
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 products to make sure that the
food
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 they consume is clean and
hygiene
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hygienic
.
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, they always come to prestigious stores for the fresh foodstuff
instead
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 of grabbing the
food
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 that has no origin. In conclusion, it seems that cost is one of the
criteria but
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criteria, but
 not the priority when people buy
food
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. How and where the
food
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 is produced are the main concern for most buyers.
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