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Some people say the Olympics Games are not relevant in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

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Internationally recognized games
such
 as Olympic
game
 has held significant value since time immemorial. It is disagreed that Olympic
game
 is not important in our times. Analysing its role of uniting nations and popularity gained by athletes as well as improving the economy of the
host
 country will prove
this
.
First
 of all, during Olympic
game
, countries overlook their differences and participate in games together.
For instance
, South and North Korea have been involved in war for a long time, but during Olympic
game
, these two countries come together and engage in healthy competition.
Therefore
, during these internationally recognized games, nations put away their differences and compete healthily.
Secondly
, the aim of Olympic
game
 was solely to stop the
Second
 World War. The commencement of these games promoted peace and unity amongst countries that participated in the games. Futhermore, the
host
 country benefits from hosting internationally recognized
game
. There is an increased growth in business.
For instance
, Brazil attained a high level of development by hosting Olympic
game
 as well as world cup. Because of
this
, countries contest to
host
such
 big games so as to gain in every sector.
Moreover
, athletes gain international recognition by participating In Olympics. Athletes representing individual countries are well known once they win a trophy. To illustrate, Chioma Ajunwa who represented Nigeria in race back in 2004 is still a popular athlete all over the world because of her the multiple gold medals she won. In conclusion, I disagree that Olympic
game
 is not inappropriate in
this
 recent times because it has been helped in bringing nations together and
also
 has contributed positively to the
host
 country’s economy and development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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