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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the past twenty years,
climate
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change
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 is becoming one of the biggest issues on a global scale.
Although
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 a huge number of people are concerned about
this
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 issue, some people claim that we should try to live with it
instead
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 of preventing it. To my mind, I totally disagree with
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 opinion. The
first
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 reason is that people cannot always
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 their lifestyle to fit with the mother nature's changes. Indeed, human is intelligent and they can construct buildings sustain with extreme conditions like earthquake and
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a hurricane
.
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, there will be a certain time in the
future
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 people cannot find a solution to deal with
climate
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.
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, trying to live with
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 is just a temporary solution. Another reason is that preventing
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change
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 is not only for the
present but
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present, but
 only for the
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. Recent research has shown that there will be no human living on the Earth within 100 years because of natural disasters. In fact, there
is
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were
are
have been
are being
 already
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less
 places for human to live than before due to the rising of sea level caused by
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change
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. If people just only find a way to live with
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, the end of the human era will occur in the very near
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 and it is so selfish if contemporary people just think for themselves than for the
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 of their children. Changing a way of living to comfort with
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change
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 definitely cannot prevent it, but only cause the sooner human extinction. In conclusion, I believe that addressing with
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instead
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 of avoiding it is necessary to protect the environment as well as the Earth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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