It is observed that some ex-prisoners commit crimes after being released from the prison What do you think is the cause? How it can be solved?

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The increasing rate

Increasing rates

of crime is a severe problem these days and ex-criminals’ contribution in committing criminal activities repeatedly is quite evident. I think these offences are disastrous to the society and should be treated meticulously by the government. The primary reason is, some accused are not getting proper justice due to many factors

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as lack of evidences, unable to afford a good lawyer

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conspiracy

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the conspiracy

of the opponent and

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much

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cases, if they get imprisonment for a wrong allegation, it might lead frustration

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them and they might come out of the bars to take revenge in the future.

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, a few criminals are psychologically sick and they could not comprehend the effects of crime in the society. What’s more, they are not afraid of imprisonment or any judicial punishment, which may lead to more murders, robberies, abuses in the society. To address these problems, the

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and foremost step is psychological counselling so that the violent and anti-social tendencies in them can be removed. Indeed, criminals can get these educations inside the prison, if the accountable authorities seriously think about it and implement the same.

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, the judicial system should provide proper justice to the accused.

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, the criminal case has to be assessed thoroughly before providing any punishment to the suspect.

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, government lawyers should be available to the people, who cannot afford private lawyers. In my opinion, these steps might reduce the intensity of the crimes done by the ex-criminals to some extent. In conclusion, I believe the reasons of criminals turn out to be a repetitive

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, government should take necessary measures in

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matter to diminish the crime rates by facilitating with an improved judicial system and counselling the prisoners in the right way.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

299 words

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It is observed that some ex-prisoners commit crimes after being released from the prison What do you think is the cause? How it can be solved?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Novadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

Some people believe that after hundred years life will be easier for most of people, while the others are unsure. What is your opinion?

Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child development. However, others argue that other things like Television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.