News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. Whats your opinion about it?

The
pictures
are accompanied in most of the TV and newspapers to present new
stories
very frequently. Recently there
are
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different
opinion
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carried, some
people
say
pictures
are more effective and another set of
people
has
different
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a different
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view that
words
will have more impact and effect. In my opinion,
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the usage
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of
words
will have more emphasis on readers and viewers rather than
pictures
. Newfangled
stories
telecasted
in
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television and written in newspapers have concentrated more
of
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a picture.
This
will not keep the attention of the viewers or readers, since what you see as
picture
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a picture
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mind
cannot
retain
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be retained
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for a long time and
convey
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conveyed
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to the outside world. The reason is,
most
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that most
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of the
viewer's
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viewers
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will not have proficient observation skills,
due to
which
message
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the message
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will not
convey
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be conveyed
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properly.
For example
,
the
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recent study by "Brain Games"
mind
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reading company revealed that 75% of
people
cannot keep
pictures
in
mind
for a long time.
To conclude
,
stories
accompanied by
pictures
will not have
expected
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the expected
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impact on the viewers.
Words
are the way to express our opinions.
This
will retain
in
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the human memory for a long time and has a significant effect. The reason is, as you read
words
abstract visualization will start in your
mind
.
This
will have more emphasis.
For instance
,
science
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journal published recently proved
90
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that 90
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% of
people
who read
words
can convey the
stories
in a better way. They can
also
attract
peoples
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people's
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attention. To summarise,
words
have more power rather than
pictures
. More visuals are accompanied
in
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by
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making new documentaries both in electronic and print media. The
pictures
are accompanied
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will not have
expected
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the expected
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effect.
Words
will be logical and have prominent emphasis. My opinion is
words
are more powerful than
pictures
and will be effective.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convey
  • emotions
  • capture
  • attention
  • evoke
  • impact
  • context
  • detailed information
  • journalism
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