Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person's decision making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In our society,
advertisements
are ubiquitous and Use synonyms
people
sometimes get trapped by their marketing strategies. Use synonyms
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people
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people
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decision making
, I side with those who feel that there is little impact on Add a hyphen
decision-making
people
's motivation to buy products.
On the one hand, it can be argued that Use synonyms
advertisements
are usually visually attractive to get consumers' attraction. In fact, a lot of artistic work is done for them by professional graphic artists. Use synonyms
For example
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fast
food industry often provides very Correct article usage
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quality
advertisement that makes them better than they actually lookCorrect word choice
high-quality
like
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Furthermore
, Linking Words
advertisements
are to show seasonal Use synonyms
trends
, so that Use synonyms
people
who are keen to follow those Use synonyms
trends
can be informed Use synonyms
the
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of the
trends
.
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However
, despite the benefits of advertising, I side with those who believe that Linking Words
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get less interest from Use synonyms
advertisement
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advertisements
People
in our sophisticated society, in my opinion, are way smarter than ever before and they are no longer easy to be lured by the industries. Since most customers expect that Use synonyms
advertisements
are exaggerated, they are more likely to be cautious Use synonyms
what
to believe and to buy. Change preposition
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Additionally
, I personally believe that cost-effective goods are more chance to be purchased than the goods which were Linking Words
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in
advertisements
. Price, in my view, is what matters for buyers after all. Use synonyms
Finally
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people
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opinion
on the products. Individuals are Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
most
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more
friends
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compared
advertise
.
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advertising
although
advertising often shows the Linking Words
trends
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people
, consumers are now wiser when they try to buy something than before and they Use synonyms
also
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said
, not the information Wrong verb form
say
on
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in
advertisements
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, on balance, I strongly believe that advertising has no impact Linking Words
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on
the
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decision making
process.Add a hyphen
decision-making
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