Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person's decision making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In our society,
advertisements
are ubiquitous and
people
sometimes get trapped by their marketing strategies.
However
,
although
some
people
believe that advertising can influence
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people
's
decision making
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, I side with those who feel that there is little impact on
people
's motivation to buy products. On the one hand, it can be argued that
advertisements
are usually visually attractive to get consumers' attraction. In fact, a lot of artistic work is done for them by professional graphic artists.
For example
,
fast
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food industry often provides very
quality
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advertisement that makes them better than they actually look
like
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.
Furthermore
,
advertisements
are to show seasonal
trends
, so that
people
who are keen to follow those
trends
can be informed
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current
trends
.
However
, despite the benefits of advertising, I side with those who believe that
people
get less interest from
advertisement
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advertisements
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.
People
in our sophisticated society, in my opinion, are way smarter than ever before and they are no longer easy to be lured by the industries. Since most customers expect that
advertisements
are exaggerated, they are more likely to be cautious
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to believe and to buy.
Additionally
, I personally believe that cost-effective goods are more chance to be purchased than the goods which were
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advertisements
. Price, in my view, is what matters for buyers after all.
Finally
, the strongest
argue
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is
that
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people
's personal
opinion
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opinions
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on the products. Individuals are
most
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likely to trust their
friends
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friend's
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or relatives' personal opinions
comparing
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to
advertise
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. In short,
although
advertising often shows the
trends
to customers and they are usually well designed and attract
people
, consumers are now wiser when they try to buy something than before and they
also
tend to believe what other
people
said
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, not the information
on
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in
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advertisements
.
Therefore
, on balance, I strongly believe that advertising has no impact
for
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the
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people
's
decision making
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decision-making
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process.
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