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Some people think that shops should sell food products from the local areas rather than products from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Selling of food products from a local area rather than products from other countries is of tremendous importance to the
community
 or country whose major aim is to develop and encourage locally made products. In my essay, I will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 some of the key points to support my opinion that shops should sell food products from local area rather than products from other countries.
Firstly
, selling of local products encourage the development of the small and medium business in the locality and create more awareness of the
local
Suggestion
locally
 made products thereby increasing
sells
income (at invoice values) received for goods and services over some given period of time
sales
 for the seller.
Secondly
, the selling of local products
assist
Suggestion
assists
 in boosting the economy as it is one of the major
way
Suggestion
ways
 for an economic development when the local products are purchased regularly. Buying of local products
also
 assist in reducing spoilage of
local
Suggestion
locally
 made products as there will fast
sells of products that
Suggestion
sell products that
sell of products that
 are perishable.
Moreso
Suggestion
More so
, in a
community
 where the people patronize locally made products, there will be an increase in good health
as a result
 of happiness that emanate from people feeling satisfied.
This
 will
also
 promote agriculture in the local
community
as a result
 of
frequent request
Suggestion
frequent requests
 for raw materials.
In addition
 to the above points, buying locally made products helps to reduce the risk of contamination or diseases that may be imported into the
community
 when
this
produce
Suggestion
product
 are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 imported.
Finally
, I agree that shops should sell more of local products rather than products from other countries. Thank you

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