Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

Some people believe that
music
is a
best
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good
road for taking people of different cultures and ages together. A few people
also
believe that
music
is just a
song
for
relax
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relaxing
. In my opinion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree
music
can
bringing
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bring
people of different cultures and different age together.
Music
come from like,
acient
belonging to times long past especially of the historical period before the fall of the Western Roman Empire
ancient
human,
animal birds
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animal, birds
and nature.People
are create
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create
are creating
their own cultures by creating
festival
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a festival
the festival
,
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,
the main thing in
festival
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the festival
a festival
is
music
. So people are creating
music
for their own cultures
.
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.
There are
alot
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a lot
of different people in world wide.
Obisuly
it is
also
a lot of uncountable different cultures. In
generally
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general
, all cultures have their own festival and
music
styles. Even there are various
misic
an artistic form of auditory communication incorporating instrumental or vocal tones in a structured and continuous manner
music
around the globe
music
speak the same language.
Music
is a thing feel by heart. For every
song
and a good melody people are ready to
listen they
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listen, they
don't
cretized
which
cultures
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cultures, song
song
is that and there is no people who said because of their culture
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
do not like their
song
. So basically,
music
can manage people to bring from
different culture
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different cultures
a different culture
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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