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People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our life generally more comfortable but it is a pity many traditional values have been lost on the way to such materialism. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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In
this
contemporery
characteristic of the present
contemporary
 era, everyone wants to live a comfortable
life
.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
workhard
Suggestion
work hard
 to get all the essential facilities for their better lifestyle.
However there
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However, there
 is a heated argument over the issue that people forgotten their cultural as well as traditional values in
rush
Suggestion
the rush
 to buy everything for a comfortable
life
. My inclination lies in line with
this
 view. I see eye to eye with the central idea for various reasons.
First
 and foremost, people become more materialistic nowadays, they only focus
on show
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on, show
 off about their affluent lifestyle.
Therefore
, they need to work harder and
such
 people work even more than the average working hours to get success in less time.But, in craving of getting wealthier they are getting far away from their natural daily
life
 schedule, they did not have time to meet their parents friends and family.
Secondly
, people from rural areas left their parents over there and move to urban areas to get better
employement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
 opportunities,
afterthat
Suggestion
after that
 they lost in
materialistic world
Suggestion
a materialistic world
the materialistic world
 In
rush
Suggestion
the rush
a rush
 to get more money for their comfort people use many different ways, either positive or
neagtive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
negatives
 no matter they only need money.
In addition
 to
this
, they hardly get time to go to religious places, libraries and cultural events from where they get some useful knowledge and stay in touch with their diverse and rich culture.
Last
 but not least, due to advancement in technology
,
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,
 everyone has
smarthone
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 and coming generation
tottaly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
totally
 relies on these latest gadgets.
Although
, they think there is no
socal
relating to human society and its members
social
scale
school
 status in society without these latest gadgets.
Thus
, they did not respect their parents and fight with them for
such
 items.
However
, there are few people,
Although
, they are famous and live
good
Suggestion
a good life
the good life
life
, they stay in touch with the roots of their affluent culture. To recapitulate, I believe we should live a balanced
life
 so that we can learn various
aspect
Suggestion
aspects
 of our
life
 from our rich
haritage culture
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heritage, culture
heritage culture
 and teach our
next
 generation respect, love, happiness and other ethical values.

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