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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

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As a popular saying "Precaution is better than cure".
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 some people believe that
government
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 should use their funds for taking precautions rather than spending on medication and treatment. In my view, taking the right prevention measure can solve most of the
health
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 illness.
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 with, there are various diseases that are caused by lack of
cleanliness
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. It is important to maintain a high level of
cleanliness
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 in the country. With garbage spread across and bad sewage water, it becomes a breeding place for mosquitos which causes one of the most detrimental disease name malaria.
Such
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 kind of diseases can spread widely across individuals in a short span of time, which can be very detrimental to
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 and can
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 result in death of a person.
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, in the recent times there are various countries that have been working towards
cleanliness
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 campaigns.
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, the
government
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 can create awareness and hygienic standards of living it will improve the
health
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 conditions. To illustrate, in my country the
government
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 has launched a "
cleanliness
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 campaign" where it is creating awareness among the people on the importance of keeping the nation learn. Funds should be used on conducing
health
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 seminars, which would educe the individuals. To conclude, even though the
government
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 should spend some portion of its funds on the treatment and medication.
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, it is vital to ensure that the public funds are being utilised to improve the hygiene levels and create awareness among citizens in order to prevent various diseases.
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