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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

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Since death toll numbers on our roads have been increasing year on year basis. Some people believe that tougher rules must be implemented on teens like to have an eligibility
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 of 24 and over to drive, whilst other people believe that teen should be educated on effects of rash and drink driving which is one of the major causes of death on the road. I believe that setting an
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 limit for teens is not the solution and in
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 essay, we discuss how can find alternatives to
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 problem. There should be an
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 limit to when a teen can start riding a motorcycle, but rather than having them to learn a new skill later on in life, it can be productive to let them learn from 16-18 years of
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 with a learner
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 with several restrictions.
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, having various stages before getting a full
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 and heavy penalties for breaking any rules would be a positive way for a teenager to learn from his mistakes or to avoid mistakes overall.
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, a teen in Australia has to go through four stages of the
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 before he can apply for a full
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, these stages run over four years and have a severe penalty if the rules are not followed according to the stage. Another way the government can help reduce the number of teen fatalities on the motorcycle is by educating them through ads. Placing the ads in an educational institute and on the roads can create awareness amongst the youth of the consequences of drink driving and rash driving.
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, New Zeeland government is placing advertisements on television, radio and the internet by showing how the accident victim regrets dangerous driving. Overall, I firmly believe, that rather than stopping teens from driving a motorcycle, we should implement a tougher procedure to obtain a
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 as well as creating awareness amongst the youth on the positives of safe driving.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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